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Title: Yearning

Words: approx 130

Pairing: Jack/Daniel

Genre: free verse

Rating: adult for the picture prompt

Season: after Meridian

Notes: This was inspired by the picture Jack’s Bedroom by Rosie, prompt #55 at [community profile] jackdanielpromptfic. It is a beautiful piece of artwork but for some reason it made me feel...well, like this.
Thanks to Kayla for the beta but all mistakes are my own.

Yearning

I sleep and I dream...

That he’s here

Touching me

Filling my senses with his scent

Loving me

Making me feel complete

Like none before

And then I wake

And he’s gone

Like he was never here

But he was

Once

Before I let him go.

Now he’s out there

Somewhere

Making a difference

And I’m still here

Alone

Wishing I’d been enough

Knowing I wasn’t;

The wonders of the universe beyond compare

To him

My Daniel.

I gave him my blessing

My pain

Obscured by a smile

A lifetime ago

Just yesterday

And life goes on

That is the way of things

For everyone

Including me

No one knows that better

But all I want to do is lie here

In my bed

Waiting for sleep

And the chance to dream

Of him.

(no subject)

Date: 2012-01-05 02:48 am (UTC)
sid: (Jack regret)
From: [personal profile] sid
Oh! I was just looking at that picture today. I love where you went with it - sidestepping the obvious and going for the Season Six gut-punch. Ow.

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Date: 2012-01-05 05:32 am (UTC)
paian: Jack with his head thrown back in a beam of light (jack tantalus by salieri)
From: [personal profile] paian
This is beautiful. Introspective first-person Jack doesn't usually work all that well for me, and it works really well here. The simple bleak honesty of it is powerful, the way it bares his interior without any deflecting sarcasm or humor. 'I gave him my blessing / My pain / Obscured by a smile' brings his expression in the farewell scene in 'Meridian' so vividly to mind while conveying how it felt to be on his side of his face. 'Wishing I’d been enough /
Knowing I wasn’t,' yeeeeeooowwwch. I can just feel the quiet darkness of that room he's in, physically and metaphorically. Love it.

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Date: 2012-01-05 08:12 am (UTC)
antares_dw: (Default)
From: [personal profile] antares_dw
*sigh* This is so sad - and captures Jack's thoughts so well!



(I'm so glad I know how the "story" with Daniel ends *g*)

(no subject)

Date: 2012-01-05 09:04 am (UTC)
discodiva76: (J/D Abyss Blue)
From: [personal profile] discodiva76
Ouch!...oh the pain....but so beautiful!..

Thank you...


Deeds xx

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