Separated 2
Jun. 3rd, 2007 07:04 pmTitle: Separated
Author: le_russe_satan
Rating: PG-13, maybe R in future
Pairing: Jack/James
Summary: Norrington has suspicions, Goddesses play.
Disclaimer: Everything, except my imagination belongs to Disney.
Warning: AWE- SPOILERS.
Chapter 2.
Several days after
“Ah, Commodore, I am glad you were able to come. Have a seat”, Lord Winwood moved to a table, where all sorts of decanters stood. “What would you take Commodore? Whisky, port? I do recommend the madeira, though”.
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“If I thought you were robbing me of it, I would not offer it, would I?”, Lord Winwood smirked, settling in a couch opposite to James’s. “The dinner shall be served presently, Commodore, but I wish to talk you first, for unfortunately I do not have the time for after dinner pleasantries.” Lord Winwood’s face grew solemn and he we sent silent for a few moments, during which James studied him.
Lord Winwood was obviously older than James, though James did not think me older than forty five. He had dark brown hair, not unlike his own, sprinkled with grey at the temples. His eyes were light brown, almost amber, sparkling with gold. He could not be called very handsome, but his features were nevertheless striking with high cheekbones, determined, though slightly too square a chin, thin lips and straight nose. His figure was just as lean as his face, and though he was the same height as himself, James was suddenly sure that Lord Winwood, despite being a peer and in no way a soldier, was strong, perhaps strong enough to overpower him.
“Commodore, what do you know of Black
“In all honesty, my lord, not much is known. According to dispatches I have received from our spies, she was sighted about two weeks ago in
“However, it was said that Sparrow no longer captains her, it is under the command of one called Barbossa.” Lord Winwood’s face did not betray anything this time, but for a split second, before the stern measuring look was leveled at him, James fancied he saw some fleeting emotion in those amber eyes.
“Indeed? I wonder what happened to her real Captain”. After this Lord Winwood steered the conversation into the matters of
“By the way Commodore, your new ship will be arriving shortly from Kingston. I do believe she is called Diana”.
Jack spotted his beloved
“I can see you too, luv”. They both laughed at their somewhat idiotic statements.
Edana was not crying for there were no tears left to cry. Laying flowers over freshly filled grave, she only wished they had a child, so there was something substantial left to her, something to remind her of Dolan. Although they spent years at sea, after being mortally wounded by Viking sailor, Dolan insisted on returning to land to die. They buried him separately from other crew members, as if there was everyone knew he was not just a man. No one stayed on the knarr, when their Captain was dying, hoping against hope that he’ll live.
After the burial some of them went back to the ship to get her prepared for a new voyage, and came back shouting that she was gone. Vanished. Edana could not help but smile. Of course she was gone, for Dolan was gone too. As she sat watching the grave snatches of their conversations flooded her mind.
“So what is she called?”
“Pearl”.
“Why?”
“Edana, you curious little…”
“Oh, Dolan, you’ve told me so much already, you might as well tell the rest”. Dolan sighed, and she snuggled up closer to him. They both lay on the knarr’s deck, enjoying the view of the velvet black sky that seemed to have been embroidered with sparkling diamonds.
“My foster mother was called Fand[1], and she was kind to me, though she had every right to spurn me”.
And than the words Dolan said to her, just before he passed away.
“Remember, Edana. I will come back, and so will you, and we will meet again. In a different time, in a different place, maybe different people, but we will meet. I promise you”. At the memory of these words she found her ability to cry restored. She could not even pray to gods that Dolan will find her again.
The long suffering crew of Black Pearl has finally decided that Barbossa was indeed mad, overpowered him and locked him in the brig. The man did not even struggle, muttering something incoherently under his breath, and this only seemed to strengthen their conviction. They knew not why Barbossa wanted to reach the island, they sighed earlier on the horizon, but decided they might as fell make landfall to stock up on fruit and fresh water, if there was a source of it.
Later that day, they were as one convicted of their own madness, as they saw none other than Captain Sparrow himself waving at them from the shore. Ragetti and Pintell were sent ashore first in case there was something evil on land luring them into a trap by taking on a disguise. However, it soon was proved that it was no evil, simply their other mad Captain. This called for a celebration and everyone, including the said Captain, got promptly drunk, which explained why only one of them questioned Jack’s presence on the island where Barbossa was heading, and was actually satisfied with the answer.
“Oh, you know turtles. Nothing exciting”.
As the men started to fall asleep around the fire, Jack climbed aboard the ship, and went down to the brig. Barbossa was seating already sitting in a corner, but as he saw Jack, he tried to back even further into the corner, staring wildly at him.
“I think you took it just a bit too far. He has indeed gone mad; I thought the crew was exaggerating”. He shook his head, feeling somewhat sympathetic towards the older man, who was never his friend, yet did earn his respect. A sinister chuckle vibrated through the
“Whatever am I to do with him now?” muttered Jack, not entirely content with his ship’s words.
She ran and ran, noticing nothing. Screams of agony and pain, the smell of blood around and inside her. The Saladin’s army has taken the city. It seemed peaceful enough at first as wars go, but now that those who could pay their ransom left, soldiers started to pursue the Frank men and women left in the city. Slavery or death would be the fate of everyone who was captured in
Her dress and brown hair were covered in dust and dirt, and she only hope he would deem her unworthy of his attentions and kill her immediately. In her fear she did not even notice that he was holding her firmly but gently, a small smile playing on his lips. They stood like this for what seemed like an eternity until the man said sofly, French words heavily accented:
“Look at me”. She obeyed. He was handsome. Black hair cut short, free of any headdress, brown eyes, high cheekbones, lips made for kissing, caramel skin. She knew at that moment that she could fall in love with him, were the circumstances different. He smiled looking into her green eyes.
The screams continued, stench of blood permeated the air, but she suddenly felt safe in the stranger’s arms. He was not going to kill, rape or make a slave of her.
“My name is Marine, what’s yours, handsome one?” The man laughed, drawing her closer, burying his face in her dusty hair.
“Najib”. He smiled at the irony of the name. Of noble descent. He couldn’t have chosen better himself. “I have found you again”. Though his words didn’t make sense, as soon as he kissed her, Marine understood. Remembered.
Two women stood staring at each other. One had brown skin, hair tangled up in dreadlocks, intricate markings on her strangely beautiful face, her dress somewhat tattered. The other was a vision of purity in her simple white dress, golden locks falling past her waist, cold grey eyes looking disdainfully at her counterpart.
“Calypso, this is a dangerous game you play. His father might have disowned him, but I will not abandon him”, spoke the fair one. Calypso chuckled.
“Ah, but you be not his ma, Fand”.
“I might not have given birth to him, but in all other respects his is my son”, Fand’s expression was resolute as she continued. “So Calypso, if you do not want to be bound again, and this time by gods not humans, you better tell me, if there’s a way to undo your spell”.
Calypso did not show any fear or worry, but she almost flinched under the steel gaze of the higher goddess.
“Aye, Fand, there be a way”.
“What is that way?”
“Now, that would be telling, but if you give something..”, Calypso stretched her hand out suggestively, cocking her head to the side.
“Still trading your favours, Calypso? Fine, I shall buy them, but if you interfere any further, you shall feel my wrath, and your father will not help you”, with this Fand ripped a white, tear-shaped pearl off her necklace and handed it to black haired goddess, who promptly chuckled eyeing the payment.
“Now that you paid, I’ll help you. A kiss won’t be enough, he has to look to the beginning, do what he did to get that kiss”. The last word ended in the hiss not unlike waves running along the sand, and the black haired goddess faded away. Fand stared briefly at where the other woman just stood, and let out a melodious laugh.
“You, Calypso, have much to learn. I have been fooling mortals and gods alike far longer than you have, your riddles mean nothing to me”.
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Date: 2007-06-03 03:48 pm (UTC)Do you mean not abandon him??
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Date: 2007-06-03 03:54 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-06-04 03:40 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-06-04 01:25 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2007-06-04 05:05 pm (UTC)What I cannot understand, is why you got rid of Barbossa so soon and in such a simple, sidekick way? Don't you think it lowers the quality of an otherwise good text? And the return of Norrington could have been turned into a bigger, more exciting adventure, couldn't it? But if to exclude these two doubts f mine, the fic is a nice one. It's rather well-written, but if I were you I would have done something with the way sentences are connected, for sometimes they do not stick to each other well. This is pure IMHO, I hope my critics did not dissapoint you.
Anyway I promise to keep an eye on your fic at least because I'm interested in watching the development of the text with a concept similar to that of one I'm writing at the moment. But right now, reading your text is real pleasure to me.
I wish you'll update soon.
(блин, надеюсь, я не зря парилась, пиша ревьюшку на английском. Автор, ваш ник меня пугает!!))))
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Date: 2007-06-04 05:24 pm (UTC)Anyway, thanks a lot for reading, feel free to criticise me in future. ))) Will be interested to read yours.
(Нет, не зря. Чуть не упала, прочитав комментарий в скобках. Не пугайтесь, это мне давно еще в школе придумали. )
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Date: 2007-06-04 05:56 pm (UTC)\\\\\Actually, it's not really supposed to be potc-4, so i guess that's why Barbossa suffered, besides I don't like him much )))\\\\\\
О, я тоже Барбоссу недолюбливаю, хотя именно он меня в 3 фильме порадовал.. У меня другое искушение: я терпеть не могу Лизку, но если формат фика, который избрали вы, позволяет её прибить любым возможным образом, то я решила to stick to the canon. Поэтому я
ем кактусы и плачу, ем и плачусделала её одним из главных персонажей. С другой стороны, в этом свой челлендж... К тому же формат "ПКМ-4" не запрещает мне её хорошенько помучить *evil grin*\\\\\\Norrington's return: here I really just couldn't come up with any good and feasible ideas tbh, but if I do, it will be written in form of memories.\\\\\\
О, у меня Норрингтона _случайно_ спасает Джек Воробей, в процессе присвоения одного интересного артефакта, хранящегося, как ни пугающе это звучит, в царстве Аида)) Этот кусочек можно найти здесь:
http://ishtar1917.livejournal.com/4962.html?mode=reply
Этот отрывок займёт почётное место где-то на границе начала и середины фика.. У меня есть скверная привычка писать не всё подряд, а то, что хочется)))
As to sentences connection, I'll try to connect them better, but maybe my English is just not good enough to make the text flow.
У меня, на самом деле, та же проблема. Я слишком кратко формулирую свои мысли, не умею "лить водичку" и красиво связывать предложения друг с другом. Я замечаю этот недочёт в чужих фиках именно потому, что борюсь с ним у себя)))) Что до английского: каждый раз, когда я собираюсь писать фик, думаю, не попробовать ли инглиш, но всё время отказываюсь от этой мысли. Я соглашусь, только если найду толковую бету, для которой английский - родной язык. Но на данный момент у меня нет беты даже для русского текста :(
Я, кстати, безумно рада найти русскоговорящего человека, которому сносит крышу спаррингтон. Я по ПКМ зафангёрлилась совсем недавно, сейчас нахожусь в процессе поиска хороших фиков а фандом, к сожалению, небольшой, со всем вытекающим... Тут до сих пор, как мне показалось, измеряют качество фика длиной, нцшностью и соплесиропностью. По крайней мере, все встреченные мной в сети рекомендации вели на бессюжетные макси с огромным количеством НЦы.
Быть может, вы мне подскажете какие-нибудь неплохие фики?
*посмотрела ваш профиль* по-моему, наши предпочтения во многом совпадают. Я снарри-шиппер с 2002 года, и по ЗВ слэш люблю, правда, не с Ханом Соло, а с Дартом Молом))))
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Date: 2007-06-04 06:21 pm (UTC)Спасать Норрингтона Джеком, мне мешал сюжет. Сволочь, а не сюжет. )) А вот предложения... По-русски, то я еще модет водичку и налью, а вот на аглицком, но буду стараться. Тяжеловато без беты англоговорящей конечно.
Насчет фиков. На сайте www.fanfiction.net поищи фики Guardian Angel, Fathoms и White Admiral (так по-моему). Автор один и тот же, все фики - сперрингтон. Сейчас она (anyasy или manic_intent) постит на сперрингтон сообществе новый фиr. Еще хороший автор drilbinbongo (если не ошибаюсь). Вообще-то кроме сперрингтона, я почти ничего больше и не читаю.
Да снарри FTW! А вот слеш по ЗВ мне приличный почти и не попадался.
З.Ы: если есть аська, вот мой номер 322335402
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Date: 2007-06-04 07:09 pm (UTC)Да, без Лизки никуда не деться.
К сожалению, что бы хорошо написать, нужно полюбить персонажа. Как раз этим я сейчас усиленно занимаюсь))
\\\\\\\\\\\А с каноном у меня вообще плохо, особенно, после того как прочитала, что Барбосса якобы Pirate Lord of the Сaspian Sea. lol.\\\\\\\\
АААА!! Где ты это вычитала? "Промыслы Каспия? Килька ты каспийская!" - цитатка из Китайского Сервиза очень кстати)))
Бориску на царствоБарбоску в Каспий - это жестоко, мне его даже жалко. Интересно, чего он при таком раскладе на Каррибах делает? Далеко ведь... Мамо, надо бы мне почитать Википедию, а то у меня самой с каноном беда. Я знаю только фильмы, при чём, последний видела лишь раз((((\\\\\\\\вот предложения... По-русски, то я еще модет водичку и налью, а вот на аглицком, но буду стараться\\\\\\\\
Вся беда в том, что нужно писать связно и распространёнными предложениями, но без водички как таковой. Но это, как грицца, высший пилотаж. Если ты ходила по ссылке, то могла заметить, что у меня самой с этим проблемы((
по поводу фиков.. Не думала, что на фф.нете есть что-то толковое по такому популярному фильму. Я всегда побаивалась заходить в этот общепризнанный "отстойник". Там слишком сложно найти что-то хорошее, особенно, если фандом более-менее активный. Вот и неделю назад открыла фф.нет на предмет фиков по ПКМ - а там сплошной Лизкотрах(((
\\\\\\\\Вообще-то кроме сперрингтона, я почти ничего больше и не читаю.\\\\\\\\
Это радует: значит, ты в этом шипе хорошо разбираешься, знаешь, где и что можно читать... Я сейчас тоже сильно на спаррингтон подсела, и, видимо, нескоро соскочу))
\\\\А вот слеш по ЗВ мне приличный почти и не попадался.\\\\
На русском есть хороший, правда, неоконченный, фик с Молом в главной роли. Называется "Третья сторона силы", автор Агата Кри.
Из англоязычных рекомендую The Sith Аcademy. Настоящее коллективное творчество фандома. Из авторов могу рекомендовать Siubhan. Её фики выделяются не только среди ЗВшных, это золотая коллекция слэша. Вышеупомянутая "академия ситов" лежит на её сайте и легко ищется гуглом)))
В аську стучусь)