if people headcanoning a character en masse as a trans woman didn't also come with a widespread depletion and flattening of her character that would be ideal. that would be a dream come true. i agree that estrogen would save her but why in your depiction of her transitioning do you sideline her real personality and the true complexities of what this would mean for her as a person, and replace all that with like. cutesy flustered stereotypes. if she transitioned she'd be owning that shit she'd be treating it like a game she has to win. why is she blushing so much in your comic
I thought this was litmag poetry for a second.
You're the third person in the notes to say this is like poetry and re-reading it I agree!! The kind of synonymous parallelism that it's structured around has a long history in lots of poetry traditions, like biblical Hebrew. But the stiltedness (what are "bright panes" and "sunny openings" other than a forced replacement for "large windows"?) and the overuse of the parallelisms here just make the advertising language feel super hollow. It's this array of utopian homes that are described with a bunch of interchangeable virtues because they don't exist. It's kind of amazing.














