Reserved Table(Demo)

Un juego muy interesante! Esperare con ansias futuras actualizaciones!!!

Dios, genuinamente AMO el juego, me encanta, ya estoy esperando para jugar el día 2!! 😭... Siento que Finn me recordó mucho en personalidad a Pierrot de The Freak Circus, no se si te habrás inspirado en él pero me encantó. Me gusta el personaje de Finn pero lowkey él no puede ser mí perro, yo ya soy el perro y no puede haber dos perros.. Aún que creo que es obvio que amé a Jack, se me cayeron los pantalones del susto cuando se apagó la luz, ojalá pongas una opción para ladrarle 👅👅

(Agradezco a Dios saber inglés para leer semejante obra de arte)

version para android? Estoy deseando probarlo muchísimo 🥺🩷

lowkey did not expect this to be so good. Literally loved it, can't wait for the rest of day 1 and day 2. Lowkey though, if that were me when Jack turned off the lights, I would of dead ass dove under the desk instead of backing myself against the wall and I would grab the legs of the chair from under the stable and I'd try to ram into him ngl. That whole time I was just wondering what would've happened if that was actually an option :broken_heart:

Also, I really wanna make fanart for this, when I make it, I hope you will like it :pleading_face: :heart:

i was so suprised when i read this was ur FIRST vn, its so overwhelmingly good i would've never guessed 😭. I really love this storyline and very big fan of the designs. Amazing work

I cant believe this is your first ever visual novel, its so good! I wouldnt even know where to start making one lol. Hope you are well, looking forward to Day 2! ^^

Omg I don't usually comment on itch games because I'm shy but I loved this! I loved the monster designs and the setting and I can't wait to continue!

Just as a note there are a couple of typos, such as sentences missing a full stop, but that didn't take away from my enjoyment of the game :) Please keep it up!

I really like the setting. It has a lot of mysteries to it and makes me wonder more about the world the game takes place in. I also love how different Finn and Jack are from one another but some things feel a bit similar (like how both of them keep up a facade to trick the player into doing what they want). I like Finn more than Jack though maybe it's because I have a weakness for those types LOL. Both are good in their own ways. Anyway, thank you for making this game! I really enjoyed playing it and I look forward to future updates! :D

NIOOO I LOVE YOUR GAME AHHHHHH <33333

The game has such strong potential! I deeply enjoyed playing through it and love the characterization of Finn and Jack, their designs are aesthetically pleasing, and the plot itself is genuinely interesting.

Aside from a few very minor grammatical errors, my main piece of feedback would be to look out for moments where the narration repeats the same idea twice. It's not anything major, but tightening a few lines can make the writing feel smoother and more impactful.

For example: “Maya only gave me that short explanation and left. Everything was explained to me very briefly, but I took it as an opportunity.”

Both sentences already communicate that her explanation was brief, so it can be combined into something like...

"Maya left without a glance back at me. The explanation was brief and vague, but I took it as an opportunity."

The emergency button scene was also a really nice touch! Rather than cutting information, I think it could be even more effective if some of the lines were rearranged to build suspense around the discovery.

For example: "I scanned the item more closely and noticed writing on it. I almost dropped it out of shock—I recognized that handwriting. It's *Amber's*. 'In case of emergency, press this button'"

For the part where the MC hides the button, that can potentially be condensed as well, such as...

"To avoid suspicion, I hid the button in my pocket to inspect later. I couldn't risk letting anyone find this and taking it away."

It, again, falls back to trimming small bits of padding or repetition. Nothing about it is awful by any means! The writing already has a solid foundation, but a little tightening here and there can make the emotional and suspenseful moments hit HARDER.

My last point I'd say to take with a grain of salt, because it's more of a personal preference. I LOVE descriptive writing, and I'd enjoy seeing a little more description of how characters sound before they speak. We can already see their appearances through the sprites, but their voices are left to the player's imagination!

Jack, for example, has a low voice. Is it gravelly? Smooth? Rough? Adding that little bit can help players picture him more clearly.

For example: "He spoke in a voice that's low, rough, but cordial. The kind of voice you'd expect from someone working in the military."

Overall, I love the premise you have here, and I'm BEYOND impressed that you made this all on your own (aside from some help with coding). I'm excited to see where the story goes and what future updates bring!

(I also hope this is easy to read. I understand English isn't your native language, so hopefully the translator can have mercy and convey what I'm saying.)

This is the best vn I play in the year, I love finn so much he's so cute, an amazing vn, good job :>

I love this game, the characters are interesting and I love the monster concept. What I adore the most is the art and especially Jack's outfit.. also the backgrounds. It's a good game, I love it. :))

Thank you very much! 🌨️🧸♥️

This is fascinating, and I'm really looking forward to the Android and Chinese versions.

It really has a lot of potential, the story intrigued me and the art is gorgeous ♡. I fell in love with the two handsome monsters ♡♡

hawdamn jack got me nervy

BOAF

Planning on making an actual comment later but i wanted to say that the game breaks after the naming easter eggs for liana, maya, and amber!

I'm so excited for more to be added to this.  10/10 already! <3

Thank you for making this, you've done a wonderful job! Looking forward to more updates, please take care of yourself and thank you for bringing Finn and Jack to us!

I look forward to devouring- I MEAN, focusing on the mission of Amber, ahem. (They make me wanna eat them up and play with them...)

I am so invested in this story! I look forward to seeing more. <3

Oh yeah, Russian translation is what I need

Oh my gosh I love it 😍 especially Finn. Thank you for this, I will wait patiently for the next update.

Me when Jack offers me his hand: 

OMG! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!! I CANT WAIT FOR MLRE UPDATES!

Immediately after what Finn did, I said "I want to peg him".  I like these two and my greed will make it so that I have both. Can't wait to see what the rest of the game is like and the backstory about what happened to Amber. 

Genuinely LOVE the characters, ive gotta stick with my man jack tho LOLL but srsly cannot wait for day 2 to release omg i need more of this game

LOVED THE GAME! The story  was compelling  and the characters kept me interested! loved the artstyle and character design. Both yanderes are very intriguing. loved finn the most lmaoo but 10/10 would recommend. :D

when I read "yandere sub" i downloaded it so fast lmao😭 I liked everything!! the art, the writing and of course Finn<3

I'm so excited to see more of this game.

This checks all of my boxes and I desperately need more, please gimme! Seriously I am super intrigued, the monster designs are so incredibly good and the dialogue is *chef's kiss* so good! I'll be keeping an eye on this! Very closely! 

This game is amazing! It just draws me in for more!

PEAK PEAK PEAK RAHHHH chef cooked with this one 🔥💯not only were the characters very interesting and fun to interact with, the story itself is very fascinating x3 im especially looking forward to unravel the mystery behind the facility cause, ain't no way they hired us just like that with no interview or anything 😭😭 gahh the mystery behind it is really eating me upppp

overall, this was very, very fun and i have a feeling it's going straight to my top favs hehe wishing you tons of luck with the project!! i hope it turns out how you envisioned it to <3

Aww man, I really want to play this game but it's not for Android. If it ever gets an Android version I will be more than happy to try it out! Meanwhile... I will be reading the comments to know more about it. 

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Ahh, i came across this and love itttt. Finny is my favorite but I do wanna talk to both, hehe. Can't wait for Day 2!

Sorry to ask, but your game when I search it in itchio search it doesnt show up at all? Did itchio delist your game from the search?

Obviously becoming romantically involved with two extremely dangerous monsters who also hate each other sounds like a catastrophically bad idea.. but at the same time... I like them both so much 😭 Guess I'll just have to deal with the consequences of my actions in the next updates haha